“They told me I wasn’t plain.”
Eliza sighed; she’d been waiting for this
day to come; only she never thought it would happen so soon. Abbey was still so
young.
She got down on her knees so they were
eye-level. “Don’t listen to them; sometimes people are just mean.”
Abbey nodded tentatively. Even if she
didn’t understand, she’d heard truth in her mother’s words.
“They said that you weren’t plain either,
not anymore-what did they mean by that?”
Eliza’s
face went crimson. She always knew she’d regret not moving when she’d had the
chance.
“It’s about me, baby, not you,” Eliza
whispered and Abbey nodded at that, too.
After a few seconds of silence, Eliza
pulled herself up and went back to the counter and the sandwiches she’d been
making.
Abbey stayed planted where she was, and
looking down at the floor, asked one last question:
“What does it mean to be a bastard?”*A special thank you to Arlee Bird to setting this up and continuing to do so year after year.
That's very moving. A lovely start to the A to Z
ReplyDeleteRosalind Adam is Writing in the Rain
that was a wonderful piece...
ReplyDeleteJeremy [Retro]
AtoZ Challenge Co-Host
Oh No, Let's Go... Crazy
It almost makes me want to cry. Lovely. Look forward to your B :)
ReplyDeleteOuch...people really can be so darn mean.
ReplyDeleteI'm impressed by the amount of time it will take to write all those shorts! Good to read though.
ReplyDeletePoor Abbey! That stings.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the recognition and your efforts as a minion.
Lee
Wrote By Rote
An A to Z Co-host blog
Heart wrenching!
ReplyDeleteSad but beautiful. Thanks for sharing. And loves from a fellow Melonie (even if it's spelled different)
ReplyDeleteHi from Nagzilla bloghopping A to Z
Dropping by from the A to Z. I'm #149 and a new follower! Great to meet you!
ReplyDeleteOoh, powerful stuff! It's great to meet you, Melanie. I'm hopping over as one of Matt's minions! Happy A to Z!
ReplyDeleteOh, my! That last line! Pulling on the heart strings. Nice work. :)
ReplyDelete:( Sad, but you conveyed so much about the characters and the story in just that one scene.
ReplyDeleteShannon at The Warrior Muse
That's a really powerful ending line!
ReplyDelete~Summer
The poor kid!
ReplyDeleteNow I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed that excerpt.
ReplyDeleteI'm already hooked!
ReplyDeleteConnie
I'm visiting from the A to Z Blog Challenge
Peanut Butter and Whine
Yay, another fiction friend on the challenge. I love your start. This piece has so much power in so few words. The last line is a real kicker--in a good way. Can't wait to see how your month unfolds!
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ReplyDeletelovely!
thanks so much for visiting my a-z post!
awh bless her heart :(
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