“I can’t do this anymore,” he said, looking out
his window, like he wished he was out there, already done with this, done with
me.
“Do what?” I whispered, drawing it out.
He glanced back towards me. I lowered my eyes so
he wouldn’t see the knowledge there. But he knew me well enough by then; he
waited me out, waited for me to lift my eyes. Eventually I did.
“I can’t pretend I love you anymore.”
The words hung in the air as he waited for me to
acknowledge them.
I nodded.
I didn’t know it would be so hard hearing it
spoken out loud. I mean he’d been saying it for weeks, but not out loud.
I nodded again and looked out my own window. His
passenger door opened and then closed as he went out to where he’d rather be.
Heartbreak and out of love, so sad, yet so many beautiful writings and songs are about love undone.
ReplyDeleteWonderful write yet sad.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
That was tragic, all the more so for being understated. Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteOh so crushing!
ReplyDeleteOuch. What a painful breakup moment. Again, I'm just amazed by how much you convey in so few words.
ReplyDeleteWow. Powerful stuff. You're such a talented writer, Melanie!
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written! You've done a great job conveying her heartbreak.
ReplyDeleteSounds emotional! It must be hard to say and hear can't pretend to love you anymore
ReplyDeleteBrandi @ Blkosiner’s Book Blog
Really excellent. loving this!
ReplyDeleteOh this is so sad.
ReplyDeleteVery well written.
Apathy can be the cruelest thing we can do in some circumstances. It strikes as downright vile from abroad.
ReplyDeleteJohn at The Bathroom Monologues
Great writing Mel- you really know how to pack quite a punch with just a few words.
ReplyDeleteOuch. Somewhere in America, this scene is actually playing out.
ReplyDeleteI like how you layered in a sense that it was happening to someone else until the character hears the words.
ReplyDeleteThis is a real anything can happen next scene. Great stuff, it's got my mind working overtime!
ReplyDeleteYou have some powerful writing skills, Melanie.
ReplyDeleteI feel so crushed...
ReplyDeleteOh thats so sad.
ReplyDeleteOh thats so sad.
ReplyDeleteVery devastating feeling.
ReplyDeleteOh ouch!!
ReplyDeleteYou say it so well in such few words. This is snippet is so like life.
ReplyDeleteI can’t pretend I love you anymore
ReplyDeleteReading that felt like a slap to the face!
I felt the punch... to the solar plexus!
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