“What you gonna do about it?” the man on
the other side of the counter asked, waving his gun haphazardly in my
direction.
I smiled. I was hoping he’d ask that; it
wasn’t very often my wife let me play.
His eyes stayed fixed on me as I walked
around the counter and stood in front of him. He was still confident though,
overly so. And I guess I didn’t blame him. I hardly looked threatening, that
was the point.
“That’s far enough,” he said, looking down
at me, smiling like he had all the cards and I had none.
“Funny you should mention that,” I said,
watching as his eyes showed the first sign of fear, of knowledge. That was
always my favorite part, when they began to realize what they were in for.
“I was just leaving,” he muttered, already
taking a step backward toward the door.
“No,” I said. “You went just far
enough.”
I could see in his pupils what I’d become
for him, what his worst fear was. Another clown. Who would’ve thought so many
people would be afraid of clowns?
Oh well, I thought. It's his nightmare,
I'm just creating it.
LOL. I have several friends who are clown-phobes. Another awesome story. I love the idea of someone becoming whatever their enemy fears. great concept.
ReplyDeleteIf that was the case for me the person would have to be schizophrenic.. I fear so many different things.
DeleteGreat fear to use. Who doesn't have nightmares about clowns?
ReplyDeleteThey are pretty creepy; especially because I have no idea why.
Deletedescriptive of events at game. Good one.
ReplyDeleteOoh this is great, reminds me of a boggart :)
ReplyDeletethank you. (this is me blushing)
DeleteCreepy and fun. Great little scene.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteGreat Shorts. I love that I can get a quick does of good writing in the middle of my day. I especially liked the life isn't fair post.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I've had so much fun writing these- so much easier than a full length!
DeleteNice short! I just re-read Shirley Jackson's "The Lottery." That's a lovely horror short that tightens its grip as you figure out the implications.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
I love twists and turns in what I read. It adds to the fun of it.
DeleteCreepy clowns! :) Good short.
ReplyDeleteI think it's the painted smiles.
DeleteIt is funny how many people are afraid of clowns.. I dated one once and it caused some of my friends trouble, just knowing what he did professionally (even if he wasn't in costume). Nice little piece :)
ReplyDeleteHappy 2nd week!
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That is so funny- you'd think it wouldn't matter when he wasn't in costume...
DeleteIntriguing! There's some mind games going on there - turn the fear around, I like it.
ReplyDeleteMy guess is he won't be robbing mini-marts anymore.
DeleteThat's a handy trick! Clowns are creepy.
ReplyDeleteVery.
DeleteHmm. I wonder why some people fear clowns.
ReplyDeleteI think it's the fake smile. You never really know what they're really thinking.
DeleteHi, Melanie,
ReplyDeleteWhat a ver cool story... Really enjoyed it! Like Laura said... He is like a bogart!
This story made me think of the TV movie IT based on Stephen King's book.
ReplyDeleteThat was one scary movie, but the book was even more terrifying.
DeleteAnother awesome flash!
ReplyDeleteClowns creep a lot of people out.
Thanks Elise.
DeleteGreat story. I like the little bit of humor about the clowns, almost as if the narrator is bored of it.
ReplyDeleteIt does seem like he's done it before, doesn't it?
DeleteI see great minds think alike! Like the excerpt! Clowns. The only thing worse than clowns are clown puppets! Great post.
ReplyDeleteKaren
Nice! It's the quiet ones you have to watch out for :)
ReplyDeleteLeft and Write
So true, and the "normal" looking ones.
DeletePeople should automatically know to be afraid of clowns. It's a given, right?
ReplyDeleteIt's required learning in Kindergarten. You can't go on to first grade unless you openly acknowledge that clowns are evil.
DeleteYou have an awesome imagination. You write such great short stories! That's a special gift. MM
ReplyDeletethank you. I've really enjoyed writing these. Check out my longer piece, In Lord Shadow's house. It's about 5000 words. You'll find the link up top under the tab for short stories. I'd love to hear what you think about it. Actually, I'm a little afraid because I just went to your site and saw your impeccable grammar skills.
DeleteCreepy...very good flash fiction.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
Deletehahaha yeah, it is amazing how many people are afraid of clowns. Loved the story.
ReplyDeleteI'm telling you... it's the smile. At least for me.
DeleteThis is great! I read it twice. Very clever!
ReplyDeleteGreat flash fiction piece. Were people that afraid of clowns even before Stephen King wrote IT?
ReplyDeleteI don't know. That was the starting point for me at least.
DeleteLOVE this! I sooooo want to be the clown tormenting the other guy!
ReplyDeleteIt would be fun, wouldn't it?
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