Brian waited by the door, sweat dripping
down his face.
He knocked again, less patiently that
time. The whirl of the air conditioner was so loud he figured no one had heard
him. It was a thin excuse at best, but greater stories than this have begun on
weaker grounds. He reached for the handle.
“Hello…I’m here about your ad,” he called
out, closing the door behind him. He didn’t hear it lock, because he’d at least
been right about the air conditioner; it was
loud.
Brian pulled out the flyer he’d found
stapled to the telephone pole in front of the house: WANTED: Handyman needed
for fixing things; top rate available.Top
rate sounded good to him, with four mouths to feed at home and no work all
summer.
A door slammed deeper in the house and
Brian left the kitchen, rightly figuring it would lead him to the person who’d
written the notice. Footsteps on the stairs led him up and a light on in the
bedroom led him in, just like it had the man from the day before, and the day
before that.
The air conditioner was loud enough that
the man walking in front of the house looking at the new flyer on the telephone
pole didn’t hear the screams.
Oooo... this is sooo good i want to read more!! :D
ReplyDeletecreepy good fright! love your flash!
ReplyDeleteOMG! I'm so curious as to what happens. That's a pretty powerful ending line right there. Great job
ReplyDelete~Summer
Now that's creepy.
ReplyDeleteLoved that short. I shall be following this blog this month.
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Poor Brian! But that's great writing!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your visit to my site. Have a wonderful B day!! :D
What a way to lure men in!
ReplyDeleteHello, Melanie! Yikes, how creepy!! Those poor men. Great snippet! I can feel the tension.
ReplyDeleteHappy A to Z-ing! from Laura Marcella @ Wavy Lines
Yikes! Love this flash.
ReplyDeleteNote to self: Stay away from houses with loud air conditioning units.
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ReplyDeleteCreepy! I love it!
ReplyDeleteHappy A-Z'ing! Can't wait to see your other posts!
AJ Lauer
#atozchallenge helper minion
Twitter: @ayjaylauer
Never walk into anyone's house! You never know what you might end up as.
ReplyDeleteMore, more. That was great! Hope you'll visit back and follow as well.
ReplyDeleteWow! That was awesome! And I loved this line: It was a thin excuse at best, but greater stories than this have begun on weaker grounds.
ReplyDeleteI love what you're doing with this challenge. Keep going!
It was a thin excuse at best, but greater stories than this have begun on weaker grounds.
Craigslist Killer to the Extreme. It's like a Venus Flytrap house.
ReplyDeleteYou are so right on! That was my inspiration for the story.
DeleteNice tension! Happy "B" Day!
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Loved this. I was hoping it was going to a scary place. :D
ReplyDeleteShannon at The Warrior Muse
Ooh! The tension is building.
ReplyDeleteDropping by from A to Z. First year participating.
Brett Minor
Transformed Nonconformist
Whoa! I so did not see that coming. You are great with the surprise endings. I love how you are using the A-Z theme so far. I'll definitely be back :)
ReplyDeletePretty scary stuff there. I like it a lot!
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my blog!
Interesting beginning...is there more? Good luck with the challenge! I participated last year and had a blast!
ReplyDeleteDonna L Martin
www.donasdays.blogspot.com
Ooh! Creepy and disturbing! I love it. New follower from the Challenge; I'll be back!
ReplyDeletewow ... interesting!
ReplyDeletehaha gruesome... but I like it :)
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