Thursday, April 18, 2013

P is for Promise


His nose grazed along my throat. “Right here?” he asked playfully.

     I nodded and let my head fall back, exposing more of my neck to him. He laughed quietly. “I’ll take that as a yes.”

     I sat up straighter and looked at him. His eyes were bright with the restraint.

     “To which part?” I asked and watched as the meaning of my question registered in his mind.

     “Hopefully to all of it,” he finally said, pulling back, suddenly guarded.

     I bit my lip as I nodded. “It was.”

     The soft smile started in his eyes and kept on until his whole face lit up. 

     The next graze I felt was cool metal on the fourth finger of my left hand.

      “Right here?” he asked and I nodded. Right there.

58 comments:

  1. Beautiful.

    Yvonne.

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  2. Very sweet. Again, you surprised me with the twist, but in a good way. P must be for romance, because we both have romantic stories today.

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    1. I almost went with P for Passion, but that's not quite where this story wanted to go.

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  3. Very sweet. And I thought it was going to be a bit filthy ;-)

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    1. Yeh...but I write YA, so there is a limit to how far I can go.

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  4. Another super short great! you're a fabulous writer, you know?!

    Texas Playwright Chick

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  5. "Blush" me with the ... er you know thought. Super sweet scene.

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  6. How erotic...and lovely! You are welcome for the nomination! As for my decision making, my blog makes it seem simple, but it's been a really tough road, especially decided between grad schools!

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    1. Yes, but it seems like you're such a strong person. The hardest part is the decision, after that you just go and give it your all.

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  7. Your pieces/snapshots of flash fiction are so perfect!! You are an excellent writer.

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    1. Thank you. I never thought I'd enjoy writing so much, but I do.

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  8. Aww, that was really sweet and touching. Nice writing.

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  9. Loved that piece. Great how the reader wasn't sure what was really being answered until the very end. Well done!

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  10. Sweet, , beautiful and precious moments. :)

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    1. I still remember when my husband proposed to me...but that is a whole different story in itself.

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  11. I love this! So subdued, yet profound. Bravo, Melanie!

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    1. thank you. I really enjoyed getting away from the creep factor for a little bit.

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  12. Cute! Lots of emotion packed into a those few words.

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    1. It wasn't quite as interesting as your P word. I am still laughing over that museum.

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  14. Oh, this is my favorite so far. I love the tone you created right from the beginning. Beautiful.

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    1. This is one of mine, too. I always need to have a little romance to draw me in.

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  15. Melanie, you just made me squeal out loud and really loud. That is beautiful! My heart was beating fast and I couldn't stop reading. I want more. Well written. :)

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    1. Thank you so much. I love these little romantic scenes. They just melt me.

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    2. Actually Julia, the characters in this story were from my trilogy, THE NEWSTEAD PROJECT. It's coming out May 1, so I'm announcing tomorrow that I'll make ebook copies available for anyone who wants to review it and post it on their site, so if you're interested email me at Melane@melanieschulz.com

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  16. I thought this was going to take a scary turn. Nice and romantic though.

    Lee
    An A to Z Co-Host
    Tossing It Out

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    1. Yeah, I have to throw in a little romance every once and awhile. It keeps people guessing.

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  17. Wow, what a beautiful moment! And captured so succinctly. Just lovely.

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    1. Thank you, and thank you for becoming a new follower.

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