Good morning everyone. I hope everyone had a wonderful mother’s day weekend. On that light note, here is my Monday short: No More.
There
is nothing; not pain, not screams. Soon I will be nothing, too. The nothingness
my life has become will be an actuality. No more never quite getting it or people
never quite getting me. No more worrying, and no more fear. No more.
I
sigh. No more Joe, either. This will be hard on him. He looks up to me in a lot
of ways, for what I have no idea, but I kind of like that he does. No more
walks through the park on my way to school, no more taking black and whites on
my grandfather’s old Pentax. No more greasy cheeseburgers from Gibbers. No more
chances, no more hopes that something will get better.
I
open my eyes and look at the blood streaming down my hand. Quickly I press my
other hand over it to stop the flow. No more.
Very powerful. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI agree. Powerful.
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Powerful and glad she decided not to do it.
ReplyDeleteSharp and final.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful.
ReplyDeleteGood play on the title. It certainly catches your attention. :-)
ReplyDeleteSia McKye OVER COFFEE
No more lack of will! I took optimism from the close.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful short. I'm a big fan of your endings. Your beginnings too, I just mean you have a great way of ending on a definitive note leaving the reader wanting to read more.
ReplyDeleteThat is really powerful. We had a foster daughter who liked to cut herself and I always worried she would take it too far. (Happy to report she is alive, well, and raising her own family now.)
ReplyDeleteYou really got a lot across in such a short story. That's impressive. The twist to the ending was wonderful. All of it was very powerful and evocative.
ReplyDeletePainful post! I love the turnaround.
ReplyDeleteNot much to add but great story as always.
ReplyDeleteKind of a lesson about what keeps us going when we're really down. We all need to be needed.
ReplyDeleteSuch a powerful piece. I'm glad she realized the good things too that she'll have no more.
ReplyDeletePowerful and painful... and a sense of hope at the end...?
ReplyDeleteAnother great piece, Melanie!
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Your short pieces are always excellent - always with unexpected endings!
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