C
is for Castaway
Day 8: Rest of the plane finally washed away. Was
able to get as much off as I wanted before it did, although the hull would’ve
been nice for a shelter; right now am making due with a make-shift tent from the parachutes. Keeps
the bugs out, anyway. All in all, doing fairly well; all things considered.
Day 10: Haven’t seen any animal signs on the
island. Not sure if that’s a bad thing or not. Plenty of fruit though; and
fish. They practically swim right up to me; like they aren’t scared at all.
Day 14: Walked around the island today. Didn’t see
another living thing.
Day 20: New shelter is up. Made sort of tepee out
of some fallen trees and covered it all with the parachutes. Should work for
the short-term.
Day 22: Saw a boat today. It didn’t stop.
Day 45: Still no living things. Fish have moved
on. The Silence is here now.
-Mel
Okay, that was awesome! Excellent job!
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Oooo. You can say so much in so few words. That last sentence has punch.
ReplyDeleteAn excellent post and most interesting.
ReplyDeleteYvonne .
From hope to despair, very powerful, well done!
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This was like reading Chuck Noland's diary, if he ever wrote when marooned on that island! Good one :)
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That silence would drive me mad.
ReplyDeleteAnd eerie place to be all by oneself...
ReplyDeleteVisiting from A/Z. I first thought "oh good, fish to eat" until reading later that the fish had moved on. Hopefully still fruit there. nicely written!
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I love the brevity of these statements. Just the way someone with few resources would handle their thoughts.
ReplyDeleteGetting stuck on an island would freak me out. I'd rather deal with zombies. :)
ReplyDeleteOooh, I like this theme! The idea of being stranded on an island sounds pretty good...until that very last line. *shudder*
ReplyDeleteAwesome job, Melanie. Such power in such a small amount of words!!!
ReplyDeletePerfect. After the first hectic making sure of survival, the loneliness settles in.
ReplyDeleteGreat flash. You give hope and then yank it away.
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Just found you today and I think I'm gonna have to come back for some other letters, good story!
ReplyDeleteOh dear. I'm quite worried about him.
ReplyDeleteIf it's always darkest before the dawn, what happens after the Silence? I'm getting a *YIKES* feeling. And I love it! :O) Very engaging, Melanie! Shared to G+
ReplyDeleteYour flash fiction is one of the main reasons I'm enjoying A-Z this year!!
ReplyDeleteRandom is an understatement... and how come there's silence.... Does Wilson show up? :)
You have such a talent of taking just a few words and weaving them into a gripping story--leaving readers wanting more. You, temptress, you!
ReplyDeleteI love the last line. Such a simple, yet profound statement. A really enjoyable story, thanks. :)
ReplyDeleteI really like this one!!! Well done Melanie! Elle @ Erratic Project Junkie
ReplyDeleteSo simple, yet effective. You captured the feelings perfectly.
ReplyDeleteThis has a profound feeling to it, loneliness.
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