tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post3885433766038527607..comments2024-02-24T00:47:46.862-08:00Comments on Melanie Schulz: IWSGAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11622191037152999869noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-84925475052142483502014-08-06T15:47:34.411-07:002014-08-06T15:47:34.411-07:00Hope you are open to a crit. Re-work you first lin...Hope you are open to a crit. Re-work you first line. It needs to make us want to read on. Emphasis on read. <br /><br />First and last lines are the most important in your story. Hope I helped. :-)<br /><br /><a href="http://emaginette.wordpress.com/2014/08/05/wisg-4-the-waiting-game" rel="nofollow"> Anna from Shout with Emaginette</a><br />emaginettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324981140248692448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-78281050586655382882014-08-06T14:48:21.028-07:002014-08-06T14:48:21.028-07:00What a hook. Very well done. I am already in lov...What a hook. Very well done. I am already in love, and intrigued, lol.<br />Juneta at <a href="http://junetakey.com/" rel="nofollow">Writer's Gambit</a><br />Juneta keyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08815758043024184034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-54012096644123435612014-08-06T10:34:10.249-07:002014-08-06T10:34:10.249-07:00Quite intriguing. I want to read more.Quite intriguing. I want to read more.M Paxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14096697282530998519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-55727994441395917022014-08-06T10:05:18.589-07:002014-08-06T10:05:18.589-07:00Now I want to know why it ends up bizarre...Now I want to know why it ends up bizarre...Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-19900479102872286472014-08-06T09:40:41.973-07:002014-08-06T09:40:41.973-07:00I more than liked it! It hooked me and has me int...I more than liked it! It hooked me and has me intrigued. I want to know more about this beautiful man.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-43602830354422579892014-08-06T09:04:30.522-07:002014-08-06T09:04:30.522-07:00What a teaser? Is he a creeper or an angel?What a teaser? Is he a creeper or an angel?Susan Gourley/Kelleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02669793865290876168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-59883375744548121872014-08-06T08:12:39.173-07:002014-08-06T08:12:39.173-07:00I would keep reading, for sure!!I would keep reading, for sure!!jaybirdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10708353376256621965noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-43065796441198159282014-08-06T06:43:07.995-07:002014-08-06T06:43:07.995-07:00It's intriguing, Melanie, good job! Best wishe...It's intriguing, Melanie, good job! Best wishes with your new venture.Deanie Humphrys-Dunnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01158137427355179676noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1208849527292516590.post-75469630819190001872014-08-06T06:05:19.449-07:002014-08-06T06:05:19.449-07:00I don't know where it's going, but meeting...I don't know where it's going, but meeting someone in a grocery store is great. It's where I met my husband!Bish Denhamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13359927719391990534noreply@blogger.com